Lovin' the Language
I'm not here right now, but I've prepared this lovely post for your enjoyment. It's part of the Lovin' the Language Blogfest instigated by Jolene Perry. Go here to get links to the others.
And what is it? I've picked five lines (passages, actually) from my work-in-progress, Drivers. (It's about a suicide-mission driver who falls in love and changes his mind about dying.) They make me laugh, smile, or cry each time I read them. (I hope they don't make y'all cry.)
So, uh, here they are, out of context and without any introduction:
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And what is it? I've picked five lines (passages, actually) from my work-in-progress, Drivers. (It's about a suicide-mission driver who falls in love and changes his mind about dying.) They make me laugh, smile, or cry each time I read them. (I hope they don't make y'all cry.)
So, uh, here they are, out of context and without any introduction:
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“Ash.” Zephyr’s breath touches my chin, she’s that close. “Thanks for saving my life today.”
“Do you mean that?”
“I—” Her voice chokes off. Her head doesn’t move, but I feel it pulling, straining against a spider-silk strand of something between us, so fragile. Don’t break it, Zephyr.
“I mean it.”TWO
Time stops in the middle of a heartbeat. In the air between Zephyr’s hands and my feet, a perfect universe has formed to contain me. I don’t dare breathe, and scarcely dare to think for fear of screwing this up. That’s what I do with everything—screw it up. I flunk classes, scare girls away, alienate family, get fired, wreck cars, lose phones, and how am I supposed to respond to this? What’s my line, the one that will bind us together in blissful happiness at the end of this movie? I don’t know. I never know.THREE
“It’s trading one kind of pain for another. A small cut, or even a large one, is a distraction. It’s not real damage. It’s not like burning alive. No, we’re looking for quick, clean deaths, aren’t we? I’ve no doubt there are things that would make you run into a burning building, but depression isn’t one of them.”FOUR
She pulls back, still grinning. “I love you, Ash Palmer.”
“I love you too, Zephyr…oh, crap.”
“I’ll let you call me the Wicked Wind of the West, but I draw the line at Zephyr O’Crap.”
“I can’t remember your last name. Something Greek.”FIVE
Words shred my voice. Tattered ribbons, like life itself. Unraveling as I drive. And all around, the world is scorched, littered with ruins. Bodies. Death and pain left by her passing.
Just like me.
Okay, from these small excerpts I already know I want to buy your novel ;)
ReplyDeleteI love these excerpts. I love the mood of #2 and #5 and I love the humor in #4. Nicely done, really.
ReplyDeleteM.J. Fifield
My Pet Blog
Lovin' the imagery and humor!
ReplyDeleteHa! The fourth one made me laugh. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteWow, you have a way with words. I think my favorite image was the spider silk...chills :)
ReplyDeleteChecking out fellow blog festies. Loved the last lines.
ReplyDeleteI'm reading this book, and all of these STILL hit me. NICE JOB :D
ReplyDeleteGreat job, Ben! There's some great images and nice voice. Zephyr O'Crap! Laughing over here!
ReplyDeleteGreat excerpts. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteLucy
#2 is my favorite.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds terrific. :) Loved htem and want to read the novel now.:)
ReplyDelete#2 really moved me with the very first sentence- well done!
ReplyDeleteI liked #2 the best.
ReplyDeleteThe Write Soil
Love the tension in #1 and the humor in #4. Good job!
ReplyDelete#4 and #5 are my favorites. Four actually made me laugh out loud and five... I could read a whole BOOK like #5. Just awesome.
ReplyDeleteWell done, Ben!
ReplyDeleteThanks, everybody. I just got back from a week-long scout camp, and have some catching up to do. (It's quite nice to come back to a bunch of positive comments, I must say.)
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