Here's the first kiss from In Memory. It's in chapter one. Yeah, I don't mess around. Actually, Brian and Esha start out as boyfriend and girlfriend. This kiss isn't their first. It's significant because of what else happens at the same time—though neither of them realizes what that is.

“I don’t doubt what you feel, but I’m sure there’s a logical explanation for it.”

“Alright. Why don’t you explain it, genius.”

She didn’t really want an answer, but Brian couldn’t let it drop. And yet, he didn’t know what to say. Surely there was an explanation. Maybe what she said was true? She had another sense. No, that ranked right up there with telephone psychics.

“There might not be a simple answer,” he finally said.

“It’s simple enough. You don’t trust me.” She folded her arms and Brian knew there was little else he could say.

He wanted to believe, wished he could trust Esha’s assessment.

She tilted her head to one side and stepped closer, sliding her hands around his neck. They stared at each other.

Something passed between them like heat through a window pane. Esha’s eyes widened for an instant before she shut them and pulled Brian into a kiss. A gorgeous warmth washed away the jumble of questions in his mind.

There really was nothing to worry about. Esha was perfectly sane and perfectly fine. She just had an extra sense, that’s all. The sense of—desire?

She pulled slowly away, searching Brian’s eyes.

“Oh, wow,” he said.


With the kiss drying cold on his lips, he slipped his fingers through hers and they continued their walk.


  1. Oh my! I love it. LOVE IT. Great job!!! Can't wait to read this!

  2. GREAT job, you!

    This--> "Something passed between them like heat through a window pane" <-- LOVE!

  3. This is EXCELLENT. I agree with chritina's favorite line. It's my fave too!

  4. I stopped by your blog a long time ago, when your book had more characters. (Or was focusing on more characters?) I'm glad you stuck the focus on Esha. She was the one that made the Good Story section of my brain go ZING! No joke. Her power stuck with me as being fascinating with lots of awesome potential.

  5. Thanks Tanya, Christina, and Melissa! Made my day.

    Jaimie, I'm glad you like the change. I've learned a thing or two in the last six months—like what exactly a plot is. :P My five-year-old daughter was the inspiration for Esha's power. When she smiles, I can't help but smile back.

  6. Yes, exactly. Some people are like that, which is why it resonates.

  7. That image of the heat through the windowpane...loved that line!
    Edge of Your Seat Romance

  8. heat through a window pane - I had it copied to paste before I realised everyone had done that too - it is a great image bright but protected warmth.
    I love Esha's name, too.


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